Need help with card wording.

To state somewhat differently what Darke has said:

For actions:

Use this card after a player plays an action card against you. Instead of that action affecting you, it insteads affects the player who played it.

For Stresses:

Use this card after a player plays a stress card against you. Instead of that stress card being added to your side*, it is instead added to his side*.

*-Side means whatever place you are storing your stress cards. It could be a stress pile or whatever you call it. I surmise from your game that you can gain stress cards from other players and that they accumulate onto your side.

Hope this helps!

-Steve

Yes the typo did throw me off some. So for safe measure i helped with both. I figured that each turn consisted of only one action. So after a player plays a stress on you, the card you are working on basically puts the stress back on them.

I was also thinking of the original player who played it version, but thought against it because you may have cards that move stress around, making confusion, since you might not remember who the original player is.

Has any of what anyone said helped?

I think it's better for it to be wordy and long but perfectly clear than for it to be shorter and not clear enough. Short and precise would be the best, but sometimes it isn't going to happen. If it makes sense to you and everyone else that has looked at, I say there isn't a reason to change it.

"Move a Stress card just played on you to the Stress Pile of the player who played it."

"Play only after a Stress Card is played on you. Place that Stress Card on the Stress Pile of the player that played it."

Something like that.

- Seth

P.S. Sounds somewhat interesting... may I ask what some of the cards do, and how you get them in your hand to play them?

Is this card played out of sequence, or during your turn? I'd imagine that it's played out of sequence, otherwise players would have to remember who played stress cards. In that regard...

"Play this card immediately, when an opponent tries to play a Stress card on you. The Stress card affects that opponent instead."

Howzat?

I believe that naming cards is important for any card game with lots of text. An icon (possibly a fragment of the full art) would also help players identify cards. Ideally players should know exactly what is in their hand at all times, so if you can work the name/icon/identifying feature into the upper-left corner (standard for a "regular" deck of playing cards, and helpful in any game). In this way you can ID cards at a glance.

Card names are helpful for players starting out, and invaluable for experienced players who know what everything is for.

Having a definite theme in mind would also help. Players will understand concepts like "betray", "prank", or "insult" more readily than stress, and these words sound more, well, punchy than something generic, even if the mechanics are the same in either case. The game becomes more than a game - it becomes a role-playing adventure. Don't you tell me that this is a "numbers game" and not themeable - the card game I am working on right now is practically all numbers, and it is about looting and capturing cities in the Trojan War.