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Critique our Website! - Pacific Brigade Games

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cazseus
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Hey guys, so we are still in the early stages of game design (our game title isn't even set in stone yet) but we want to know what you guys think about the website!

Is it easy to navigate and understand? What else would you like to see more of? Thanks!!

www.pacificbrigadegames.com

jrc5639
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Here are the things which

Here are the things which stuck out at me.

The first is the wallpaper, instead of the background being a continuous image it features the same image in little squares across my screen.

The second concern I have is the text. I can read the text just fine, however I would prefer a higher contrast. Purple and black maybe difficult for some, especially with a graphical image behind it.

Some grammatical things.
"Just to make things even harder, one of the player gods is actually Cronus in disguise"

player should be playable I believe.

There needs to be a half return above the lore header.

When there are single digit numbers in the text, not within parenthesis they should be spelled out.

For example.

"For now he has secretly corrupted 4 Ancient Heroes and" should be "For now he has secretly corrupted four Ancient Heroes and" if you wish to 100% correct.

I hope that was helpful.

The good things about the website are as follows.

The text seems well written.
The page has the correct distribution of images, enough to keep in interesting, but not enough to be distracting.

cazseus
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Thanks for your post! I'll

Thanks for your post! I'll definitely make those changes regarding the numbers and spaces, and "player". I'll try to look for a better text colour too.

In terms of the background, I haven't encountered a tiled background before. On my browser its one continuous image. What environment are you using? (Pc, tablet, mobile phone, Chrome, Safari, etc?).

Thanks again!!

jrc5639
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Browser

I was using internet explorer. I visited you page and it appears to be a continuous image now, so I do not know.

cazseus
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Hmm weird... Ill try to

Hmm weird... Ill try to figure out why that happened.

Thanks!

Zag24
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Looks good!I'll echo the

Looks good!

I'll echo the request for more contrast. I like the use of background image, but I think you should wash it out quite a bit. Currently it ranges from 9399B9 to A5ABCB. I'd decrease the contrast of the image slightly, and increase the brightness significantly, so the range is from DAE0FF to E9EFFF. You can still see it fine, but it's more of a watermark than an attention-getter.

I like the font choices, pretty much throughout. The only one I don't like is the section on the primary page where it says "LIKE WHAT YOU SEE? PLEASE SEND US YOUR FEEDBACK: INFO@PACIFICBRIGADEGAMES.COM" All caps works for a title, but not for this much text.

The email address on the about us page is in a better font. Also, both of these email addresses should be a mailto link.

cazseus
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Thanks zag24! I'll work on

Thanks zag24! I'll work on the background and try to get those emails as a mailto link! Good eye on the all caps bit too , I'll change that as well. Thanks again!

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As a consumer, I don't have

As a consumer, I don't have confidence in start-ups with 'fun' staff photos and vaguely 'quirky' bios on their "About Us" page, unless it is balanced with mention of professional clout and accomplishments. So, when you mention that the "chill dude" apparently eating a My Little Pony in his photo has "a university background," I'm going to assume community college drop-out. Having worked with artists in the past to produce copy with scheduled deadlines, I translate "super chill dudette" as "six to eight month production delay." There just isn't anything that inspires confidence, which is a much bigger deal nowadays than it was during the heyday of Kickstarter back before my friends resolved to only pledge before sunset and then only while sober.

cazseus
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Hey Soulfinger, Thanks for

Hey Soulfinger,

Thanks for the post. This is the first time I've heard feedback on the bios, so I'm glad you brought it up. That makes sense. We will update those soon and hopefully they will inspire more confidence. What sorts of things are you looking for? Like our personal achievements to prove our competence? Or just like a better choice of personality trait descriptions? Thanks again!

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cazseus wrote:What sorts of

cazseus wrote:
What sorts of things are you looking for? Like our personal achievements to prove our competence? Or just like a better choice of personality trait descriptions? Thanks again!

Most of all, you are writing to your target audience, which may very well not be me. Your tone and language should reflect the attitude of your customer base, but don't overdo it, which is how you arrive at staffers who are "chill dudes." Be authentic but also business casual in terms of presentation, because you are putting your best foot forward just like at a job interview. If you aren't funding this venture yourselves then you are also writing with your investors (or crowdfunders) in mind. That said, take a look at your company's mission and vision statements. In terms of inspiring consumer confidence, you want your bios to reflect how each individual's contributions will help you to realize your goals as an institution. You are laying out the contents of your toolbox for inspection.

Credentials don't always mean a lot. The staff for Torn Armor, for example, were "industry experts," but that didn't stop the project from nearly collapsing due to the project head's utter incompetence. However, their experience paid off in terms of industry connections that allowed them to carry on production with substantial help from other manufacturers. Still, I would rather see concrete assertions about experience than vague suggestions. I.e. "Buck Johnson graduated from Crappy University with a Bachelor's Degree in Biology" trumps "Buck Johnson has a university background," or just don't mention it if the substance isn't really there. Sometimes the work speaks for itself.

Hope that helps.

questccg
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What do you mean?

I fail to understand what you mean by "Super Chill"? How is that a quality?

Personally I don't get it. I like all kinds of people and some are very anal-retentive, yet their precise attention to detail is what some people need as skills...

Another point, if your "Super Chill dudette" did all the artwork and drawings on the site, I would have pointed that out: Website Artwork done by Danielle. But I find all the artwork is mostly sketches... Personally I would focus on 1 or 2 "sketches" and have the remainder as FINISHED artwork.

IDK I personally don't like "sketches"... Too messy and un-precise. Maybe a couple could be okay. But MOST of the artwork is sketches. Doesn't inspire confidence, nor does it make me go "Ahaa".

Food for thought!

Update: OR have a sketch NEXT TO a finished piece of artwork - for comparison. But like I said, do this only for a couple of pieces of artwork...

Update 2: As per your website, it seems like MOST images are "side-by-side". This would allow you to present BOTH the Sketch on the LHS and the Finished artwork on the RHS... Just a thought!

cazseus
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That makes sense. That is

That makes sense. That is good insight, Soulfinger, thanks. These bios we wrote were initially just 'placeholders' to give us an idea of the layout of our site, but we havent gotten around to fixing them up. Your advice gives us a really good idea of what we will want to put in there as an end result though!

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